IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The graph below shows the wheat export of three different areas from 1985 to 1990

The graph below shows the wheat export of three different areas from 1985 to 1990
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The graph illustrates the fluctuation of
Wheat
Use synonyms
exportation
Use synonyms
 in three different regions in the world, namely Australia,
Canada
Use synonyms
 and Europe from 1985 to 1990.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
exportation
Use synonyms
 of
Canada
Use synonyms
 fluctuated wildly,
while
Linking Words
 that in Europe Communist showed an increase and
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
Australia’s market declined over the 5-years period.
According to
Linking Words
 the data, in 1985, the
wheat
Use synonyms
exportation
Use synonyms
 of
Canada
Use synonyms
 stood at the highest amount among the three areas, nearly 20
million
Use synonyms
 tonnes. It
then
Linking Words
 slightly dropped to approximately 17
million
Use synonyms
 tonnes the
next
Linking Words
 year before
rocketed
Wrong verb form
rocketing
show examples
 up to around 25
million
Use synonyms
 in 1988.
However
Linking Words
, the following year,
Canada
Use synonyms
’s export hit a low of about 14
million
Use synonyms
, the lowest and
then
Linking Words
 rose back to nearly the same level as in 1985. In 1985, about 17
million
Use synonyms
 tonnes of
wheat
Use synonyms
 were exported by European Community.
However
Linking Words
, in spite of exporting less than
Canada
Use synonyms
, the
wheat
Use synonyms
exportation
Use synonyms
 surprisingly turned out the highest figure, compared to
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
 two countries, at a final point-over 20
million
Use synonyms
. Different from
Canada
Use synonyms
 and European Community, Australia exported the lowest amount of
wheat
Use synonyms
 in 1985 and continuously declined over the period, except in 1986.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, exportation, canada, million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: