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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming community building. What are the possible causes and solutions?

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Nowadays people rarely communicate with their neighbours and
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 has a negative impact on building
society
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.
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 the modern man’s lifestyle has been changed hectically and families are more cautious about their privacy, there are still some ways for being sociable in the neighbourhood.
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 essay will examine the main causes of loss of sociability and possible solutions of
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 problem. In my point of view, to live in the industrialized world has made us spend more hours away from home, so we have less free time, which is mostly allocated to relaxing and concerning family matters rather than engaging with neighbours.
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, regarding the increased rate of crimes, people are not only more cautious about their surroundings, but
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 more suspicious of the strange people they encounter.
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, while friendly relationships between neighbours are fading, people have been isolated behind the closed doors. Some possible solutions to
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 problem are organizing social meetings and promoting the sense of
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 in the neighbourhood. By arranging public events and building social gathering places
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 as parks and recreation centres, we can improve taking part in the
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 and prevent
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 separation.
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, more positive news and events should have been highlighted in the local media, which have a crucial role in the forming a committed civil
society
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. To conclude, people’s lifestyles that lead them to not communicate with their neighbours have a negative impact on
community
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 building.
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, we can significantly increase sense of
community
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 in the
society
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 by encouraging neighbourhood meeting and optimistic attitude.

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