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Large companies have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems could this cause? What could encourage people to buy more local products?

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Nowadays we are a living in a globalized and Capitalized world and some many companies with a massive power to influence and create a culture that their products are the best,
on the other hand
 local producers need to deal with
this
 huge and competitive market. In
this
 essay I will analyse the possibility that had resulted in the reality and give some options that could build a stimulated and fair market between big and small companies. From my point of the view to start off with, the most relevant fact which leaded big brands to overlap small ones was the technology, to more specifically the internet, large business and international companies invest lots and lots of money on internet marketing a result of that people star
t cho
Suggestion
starts
osing
this
 brands and thinking they have the best products making domestic companies lose space until they close down. As far I concerned, a positive measure to make people feel comfortable and confident buying from local producers would be community´s engagement and more subsidy of the government to the smaller, as a positive sample of
this
 idea happened in Brazil while the pandemic
this
 year, many blogger infl
uencers(peo
p
Accept space
(
le who work with social media) encouraged people to buy from local producers by making the advertise of them for free. In closing, with the amount of profits the companies do from the massive marketing and promotion with their products mix up the mind of people who think their products are better than a local product, valuing the international
instead
 of the national, to reduce
this
 fact would be great if the government would give support local producers and the community as well.

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