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Success is often measured by wealth and other material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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It is often considered that wealth and materialistic things a
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 possesses show the measure of success.
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, in my opinion, there are other important aspects as well. A perfect blend of supportive family, sound health and knowledge is what makes a
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 successful.
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 with, mental health is most important, a
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 under distress and tension is not able to enjoy life to the fullest and
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, a rich depressed
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 cannot be considered as an inspiration.
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, one of the billionaire donated all his wealth for mankind and proclaimed him as a monk, and
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 he spread the message of importance mental stability.
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, a peaceful state of mind signifies a happy life and can be termed as achievement.
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, success cannot be symbolised as it varies from
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 to
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, though, rich and affluent people are thought of to be the most successful persons,.
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, they may not have the same feeling about themselves.
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, a wealthy businessman, earning revenue of $2000 million, is perceived as a successful entrepreneur by many, whereas he still has not achieved his predetermined goals and
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, is not satisfied by his achievement.
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, different people set their own goals, no matter how big or small, according to their needs and desires; and meeting those targets with their sheer hard work and dedication is an accomplishment for them.
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, a feeling of contentment is the true measure of victory. To conclude, success has a different meaning for different individual. While some relate being rich to being successful; I think a sense of accomplishment through contentment is the real measure of achievement.
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