Many people feel that urban environments are more unhealty than they have ever been. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What measures can be effective tackling this problem?
On the contrary
era, there is a heated argument on the issue that urban environments are unfit for people
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people's
health
and life. There is an iota of doubt on the issue of health
. The majority of society feels more unsafe in city life than they have ever been. the following paragraph will highlight my perspectives which will lead to a logical conclusion.
Analyzing the statement, I see eye with the given aspects for multifarious reasons for the polluted environment. Firstly
, the more usage of vehicles that emit toxic gases like carbon monoxide, and nitrogen oxides disrupt the ozone layer due to
this
disruption the greenhouse effect arises and causes many health
problems like skin infections, eye infections, and rashes. The growing number of cars, buses, and trucks leads emission of harmful gases. In addition
, factories and industry are more in number in rural areas that release the infant into air and water so the bacteria and algae cause erosion and can produce the fungi in it. For example
, in a survey conducted by the Department of the World Health
Organization, the most polluted countries are Asian countries because the lack of green spaces in cities can also
contribute factor in environmental pollution
.
Certain measurements control to decrease contamination, proper disposal of water, wastewater treatment, and increase the greenery by plating the trees and flourishing the parks and gardens. However
, China controls pollution
by implying strategies for instance
governments charge a fine when a person disposes of garbage in the streets rather than the dustbin because their population is one of the largest populations in the world. Furthermore
, maintaining the population is one of the good steps to maintain the standard of living.
to sum up
, I restate that there are immutable factors oppositely that cannot be looked after about controlling the pollution
. The government and people control pollution
by maintaining discipline in life and increasing the greenery to make the environment healthy and clean.Submitted by alviusman18 on
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task achievement
Ensure your introduction clearly presents your perspective without ambiguous phrases like 'an iota of doubt.'
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitive expressions (e.g., 'There is a heated argument on the issue that...') and refine your language for clarity.
task achievement
Expand on your specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, provide more details on how China manages pollution effectively.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. For example, ensure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence directly related to the essay question.
task achievement
Your essay addresses relevant causes of urban environmental pollution.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a conclusion that restates your main points.
task achievement
You have acknowledged different aspects of pollution control, such as government policies and green spaces.