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many people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family at the same time.what problems can this create?what are the possible solutions?

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These days, many people have become more ambitious, many try to have success at work and
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 want to spend stage with their loved ones at the same point. Being able to harmony between both office and home needs
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 a great energy. In the following essay I will discuss on the issue of maintaining work-life balance and the solution for the same. The major problem associated with
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 is people try to spend their quality
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 with family members and at the same
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 they want a successful career, but in a result of maintaining these both persons gets completely exhausted physically and mentally as well. Which often leads to no more continuous and
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 will put a bad impact on person and there could be breakdown of a family and poor performance at work.It has been analysed in a career survey that these days almost 70% of the employees in the corporate world are stressed either of personal or professional life.So, the wise idea is to balance between both.
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, sharing responsibilities, cooperating with each other would definitely help in these circumstances. The best way to tackle
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 problem is to make equity in their lives by giving proper priorities to work. Another best solution is if, people take out some
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 for themselves and try to do some physical activities to maintain their mental and physical fitness.
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 as yoga, walking, running on a daily basis. Meditation and mindfulness exercise to improve their health.In a nutshell, these alternative therapies can allow persons to be very energetic at the office and relaxed while at home. To sum up, I would like to say that the great achievement always come with scarifies.In my view, to maintain a successful career and happy family at the same
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, people should focus on one thing at a point.

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