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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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Human
life
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 is divided into various phases. Each phase brings about different charms.
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, some people will argue that, adult
life
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 is the most enjoyable
period
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 of
life
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, I believe teenage has the greatest charm despite all the personal conflicts people go through. Teenagers are regarded as the people of age group of 13-19 years.
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 is the
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 when a person is going through a transition from childhood to
adulthood
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.
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, everything seems so different and people start to dream about
life
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.
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,
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 is the
period
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 when people get attracted to the opposite gender and start to feel love.
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, everything feels so beautiful and
life
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 comes to us with a different meaning.
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 to that, people feel a bit arrogant and try to defy the common rules of the society which may limit their activities of adolescence. That means,
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 is the
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 of being in love, showing date and being rebellious.
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,
adulthood
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 is the
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 of wisdom. People become matured enough due to all experiences gathered during the adolescence. In short, it can be called as the
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 of stability. Any arrogant or short sighted decision is usually avoided during
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period
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 while those decisions are common among teenagers. For
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,
life
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 doesn’t face much difficulty, rather can overcome most of the problems which are nearly impossible during teenage. In the end, it is obvious that facing & solving problems of
life
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 is easier in
adulthood
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 &
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life
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 becomes smooth. But, the colour which shows in the teenage is incomparable with that of
adulthood
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 which makes it more attractive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • fulfillment
  • responsibilities
  • exploration
  • long-term goals
  • sense of stability
  • carefree
  • contentment
  • well-being
  • life stage
  • unique opportunities
  • deep satisfaction
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