In the 21st century, many women have come out of their home to become what we call working women. What are the advantages and disadvantages of women doing work?

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In the contemporary world, females have gained popularity in professional careers.
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economic help for her family and for society's improvement
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the advantages,
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balance and more health issues are the disadvantages for a working woman.
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with, the primary benefit is additional financial support. In a family, both working parents make more money to bear the household expenses. To illustrate
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, in many cases,
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save
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salary for their kid's future education and spend only men's payments to run the house.
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, the active role of
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supports society
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. Working
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are involved in social
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and come forward to help needy
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. Moving toward the disadvantages,
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working
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feel socially and economically strong, many times they face tough situations to make
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and life balance. To cite an example, after the job,
women
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need to take care of the home, husband and kids.
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, they feel stressed sometimes.
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,
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the working environment, employee needs to be
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all day. Many companies working hours are longer than 8 hours.
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, the risk of health issues is much higher.
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, a teacher's job is required long hours of standing in class, which leads to them higher chance of back pain or leg pain. In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages for working
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. they need to make a balance in life and
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and focus on their health as well. Many
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suffer
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their old age because of too much
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done earlier stage.
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, it is their personal choice
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that depends
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on their need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic independence
  • Workforce
  • Diverse perspectives
  • Innovation
  • Dual-income
  • Work-life balance
  • Gender pay gap
  • Glass ceiling
  • Stress management
  • Traditional family roles
  • Dual burden
  • Career progression
  • Professional opportunities
  • Financial stability
  • Empowerment
  • Child-rearing
  • Societal expectations
  • Maternity leave
  • Gender roles
  • Occupational segregation
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