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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries
It is generally thought that citizens ought to dedicate to their own nations
instead
 of caring for others-blooded people because it is unfeasible to help all people who suffer hard conditions in the world.
Although
 I understand the excuses of
this
 view,
this
 essay will partly concur with
this
 because of the reasons below. On the one hand, I will not take issue with the point that the home nations should be priority when having any grant. Even in the developed countries, there are many impoverished people, and these needs the support of the governments indeed. If these people are ignored, there is likelihood that they must commit a crime
such
 as stealing to subsist.
As a result
, the societies will suffer the appreciable increase in crime rate.
Besides
, the destitute in a same community should be given opportunities to get a job because when labouring, they could devote themselves for the societies, which means that the strength of the nations will be boosted.
On the other hand
, governments should take part in international campaigns because they could bring a great deal of benefits.
Firstly
, for the rich countries, supporting others is deemed a practical method to claim their position in the world. America,
for instance
, donates an enormous amount of money for global organizations
such
 as WHO, UNISEP and it is doubtless that
this
 country have considerable impacts on the world.
Moreover
, with the advent of strange problems
such
 as virus, it is necessary for countries to join hands to solve them because
such
 matters are super complicated and a sole nation could not handle by themselves. In conclusion, I believe that the governments should spend special concerns for the own countries,
nonetheless
, they
also
 need to care the international situations

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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