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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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It is a trend that people in today life choose to run their own business
instead
 of being employed by a
company
 or an organisation. In my view, there is a wide range of causes for
this
 phenomenon, and I believe self-employment has some drawbacks. There are several reasons why people tend to become self-employers.
Firstly
, due to the growth in population, people has little chances to get good jobs.
This
 means that if you want to be a well-paid employee, you should have a high qualified degree and lots working experiences.
Secondly
, more and more young people have the desire to earn abundant money as quickly as possible. A business makes numerous profits if their products suit with the customer's need.
Thus
, starting up a business is a best choice to become a millionaire after a night.
However
, being self-
empolyed
having your services engaged for; or having a job especially one that pays wages or a salary
employed
 ban
bring
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brings
 about various problems.
To begin
 with, to start a
company
, a big invested capital is required. Certainly, new entrepreneurs cannot have
such
 large money, so they must get a loan from the bank. And if the
company
do not succeed
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does not succeed
 in the end, it will
going
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go
 bankrupt as a consequence.
Besides
, a new
company
need
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needs
 to find a potential market, which is more difficult than ever before.
Therefore
, they will be at risk because of having no consumption.

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