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Some people argree with spending lots of money on a large wedding while other think it is waste of money what is your opinion

#people #argree #lots #money #waste
Marriage is a personal commitment in every culture of our country. Absolute.
some
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Some
 people assume with investing big
amount
 of
money
 on large weddings whilst other think it is a complete
wastage
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waste
 of
money
. In
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
 we are
elborating
marked by complexity and richness of detail
elaborating
aborting
operating
 both and
then
 will give our opinion.
FIRSTLY
, marriage is
mandotary event
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a mandatory event
mandatory event
 of human life.
it
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It
 creates
apricious
characterized by feeling or showing fond affection for
precious
 memories that
cople
a pair who associate with one another
couples
couple
 can remember for their life.
On the other hand
 couple can celebrate
this
 movement with our family members and friends.
Secondly
, some families spend
immense
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immense amounts
an immense amount
amount
 on wedding to pretend or show our status.
in
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In
addition
Accept comma addition
addition, such
such
occations
something done (usually as opposed to something said)
actions
occasions
 give family members and friends to get together. On the flip side.
large
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Large
 wedding is
also
 a
wastage
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waste
 of
amount
. Some parent
get
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gets
 generous at
pweak rate
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a peak rate
peak rate
peak rates
the peak rate
 of
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
 for
adorn
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adorning
prepration
the activity of putting or setting in order in advance of some act or purpose
preparation
preparations
 of wedding the conclusion is that those are under the
piule
a collection of objects laid on top of each other
pile
piles
pale
 of loans.
For instance
privious
just preceding something else in time or order
previous
 year a father
commited
bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
 suicide. Because he got a huge
amount
 of loan from
bank
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the bank
 and could not
returned
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return
 back.
on
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On
 the
othewr
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 disadvantage of expensive wedding
is spur
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has spurred
spurs
competiton
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
in
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between
 parents.
parents
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Parents
 invest
bg
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
big
amount
 on their
chilgren
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children's
children
 wedding parties as the result is that their neighbour and
freinds
a person you know well and regard with affection and trust
friends
 starts comparing to do so. AT
last
the superlative of 'little' that can be used with mass nouns and is usually preceded by 'the'; a quantifier meaning smallest in amount or extent or degree
least
 in my
opinoin
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
,
althrough
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
 parents imagine huge
amount
 of
money
 spend is marriage brings happiness and contentment.
on
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On
 the other
side they
Accept comma addition
side, they
 can utilise
this
money
 for their
children
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child's
children's
 future or better income ideas.
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