Unemployment has become an increasing problem in the recent past What factors contribute to an increase in unemployment and what steps can be taken to solve the problem

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There are many debates about the
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relating to the unemployment in recent years. One of the most serious issues is the number of unemployed people is becoming more increasing at the moment and will continue steadily in the future. In
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essay, I will discuss the cause of the increasing unemployment and the solutions to
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problem
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. According to some researches I read, I figured out
2 main reasons
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the 2 main reasons
causing the increasing amount of people involving any real jobs. They are the development of science & technology and the streamline of business systems.
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, in about two recent centuries, mankind makes a sudden breach through the development of science and technology for a lot of industrial fields as well as agricultural fields. The growth of S&T can replace people by many efficient machines which include a lot of intelligent technology for support manufacturing the commodity all around the world.
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, in the past, a factory required many employees to produce its production, but now it only needs some intelligent machines, some engineers who control the machines and a part of previous people to do the things which have not been replaced by machines. About half of the worker is not necessary to the factory. So,
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the reason why people who do manual jobs cannot get a job. The
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cause is the streamline of business systems of not even huge corporations of small companies in recent years. Nowadays, a lot of the heads of companies realize that their companies need the quality of humans more than the number of employees they have. So they decide to cut out the inefficient employees for focusing on the good one, they sacked a part of their system and looking for
the better
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the best
candidates.
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, some research shows that a company just needs 70 percentages of present people in the system to maintain the whole
stuffs
personnel who assist their superior in carrying out an assigned task
staffs
of the company, and it does not create any significant
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for operating or finance. So, in my opinion, I think there are some solutions to resolve the unemployment
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.
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as we can identify more clearly the major ability of people and encourage them to choose the true job which fits quite perfectly with them. Or we can start-up some new industries in order to create more and more jobs for everyone.
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