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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city,while others think that bicyles are better. Discuss both points if view and give your opinion.

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Nowadays
, certain group of people argue that cycling has opted to be the best way to travel inside the
city
.
Although
, some folks are still convinced with the cars. In my view, apart from comfort, exhaust gasses release a huge amount of pollutants to the atmosphere. Indeed, it is vital to introduce; Eco, friendly transportations.
Firstly
, automobiles are the modern transportation around the world.
Although
, cars emit emissions, it is the most preferred way to go around. Over the years cars have been helping humans in different ways. Especially being fast from one point to another.
Furthermore
, travel cost has become reliable for any walks of people while an automobile with the likeness of comfort and style is at an affordable price.
As a result
, townsfolk dependency on a personal vehicle have been obvious for people's convenience.
In contrast
, the popularity of Automotives has been emitting tons of air pollutants in which the need for an Eco friendly travelling mode is, indeed. Among other competitors, bicycles have caught the
first
 impression. Since, it occupies a small amount of road space on the move and the convenience when parking.
Furthermore
, "municipalities", financial inducement on redesigning parking facilities has declined
as a result
.
In addition
, reduction in noise pollution is a healthy advantage for the towns peoples well being. Particularly, cycling has given the opportunity for the
city
 folks to keep them fit along with their busy schedules.
Therefore
, cycling can reduce
city
 traffic and pollution in the
city
 which is an overall benefit to the towns. In my opinion, alternative travel modes
such
 as bicycles are good to implement in metropolitan areas as they produce quite a few amount of pollutions comparing with cars.
City
 councils should impose additional tax on vehicles used in the cities and increment on parking ticket prices will gradually reduce the usage of cars in cities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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