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Some people believe that it is best to accept bad situation, such as unsatisftory jobs or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Our lives, from the day we are born till the day we pass away, are filled with unpredictable situations which sometimes can be psychotropic for us. But we have two options in these cases, either accept them or do our best and try to improve them. In
this
 essay I will discuss both views.
Firstly
, by admitting being in a bad position and coping with it, it can give you the opportunity to move on and fulfil your
life
 with things that really matter to you.
Moreover
, it can make you realize the mistakes that brought you there, so that they can be avoided in the future, making you a more considerate person. To illustrate, the university of Cambridge conducted a survey in the year 2020 and found out that more that 40% of the population is following a career pathway they do not desire, but are happy with their
life
 because they have learnt valuable lessons that will provide them with personal growth in the time to come. Overcoming a challenging affair,
secondly
, can be really constructive for the individuals physical and mental health. Most people in these difficult cases find themselves trapped in a reality they did not
except
regard something as probable or likely
expect
accept
, so by finding a way to improve
this
 they become joyful and for once, have a
life
 purpose.
Furthermore
,
this
 gives them the opportunity to become the best version of themselves, ensuring them a long lasting and healthy
life
.
For example
, a survey carried out by a global organization, has shown that people in underdeveloped countries that have no job and live in poverty are happier than most of us
,
Accept space
,
 because they are not forced in any position, like pursuing a career or hustling to make the most money. In conclusion, some circumstances cannot be avoided. But it's up to us to understand what has more to offer us, as a person. In my opinion, taking control over demanding situations, is a step closer to a better
life
.
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