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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Advertisement
 is the way of introducing a new
product
 to the market. The
Product
 which is advertised all over the world were not bought by every person. Since, there are plethora of
way
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ways
 to introduce the
product
 which is a kind of tactics to make the customers to buy the
product
. As
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 say these are People choice and their desire to buy or not to buy the
product
. There are some people
says
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say
 that advertising is not necessary for them to buy a
product
, whereas
,
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,
on the other
hand some
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hand, some
says
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say
 that they must
needed
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need
 to know about the
product
 through
means
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the means
 of
advertisement
 which will improvise the people to live and keep them up to date about the products and
also
 the upcoming products. I deeply agree with the point, that
advertisement
 is a platform where the people can much easily know about the new
product
 and its usage. The advertising has many ways and types to take the
product
on
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in
at
 the hands of consumers. The reason why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 stand
for
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for, this
this
 is because the knowledge of the
product
 and the procedure how to use?
is
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Is
 all given and caste by means of
advertisement
. Because, the uneducated persons can
also
 make use of the ad.The children based
product
 can
also
 be taught how to be used and where to be used in a simple ad. The relevant example,
Renault Kwid
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a Renault Kwid car
Renault Kwid cars
the Renault Kwid car
car
 which had been launched by past year, without the
advertisement
know
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knows
 one could have known about the vehicle specifications and the type of fuel to be used.
they
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They
also
 need a person who knows about the history of the
car
. The Price of the
car
 is really affordable even by the average family with of less income which in
turns
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turn
 of with a compact
car
 for them. The best way to know about the
product
 from the source of
advertisement
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the advertisement
 which has tons of records about the
product
 and
also
 the defects in it.
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