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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #customs #traditions #country
Many people fear that if
superintelligence
 becomes a reality, it will become
enemy
Suggestion
an enemy
the enemy
 of human like in the movie Terminator. In
this
 regard, many celebrities have talked about the risks coming from AI. The world-famous physicist Stephen Hawking said: The development of full artificial intelligence could spell the end of the human race…. Humans, who are limited by slow biological evolution, couldn’t compete and would be superseded. Especially/
in particular
, he
also
 warned that the development of AI will cause nuclear and biological war that have high destruction.
However
,
this
 possibility seems to be nil. The risk comes from artificial intelligence not because of the artificial intelligence is evil, wants to kill humans, but simply that human interests are not in the purpose of AI.
For example
, when people build a factory near a bird's nest, people even though they have no ill will towards the bird, they destroy it. Simply because the existence of a bird's nest contradicts what humans want to achieve.
Therefore
, because of human existence, we need to ensure that AI has suitable purposes with the benefits of human.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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