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A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation.

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 and nationalities. From my point of view, establishing a new
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 is more important than building a
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 each option has its unique advantages, the benefits of a
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 outweigh the benefits of a business
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. In the following paragraphs, I will try to explain my position more clearly.
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 and foremost, food production is the most significant issue not only in my
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 in all over the world. No one can deny the importance of food for our survival because it plays an important role in our lives after air and water.
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, my country is located between deserts and drought is a major problem in my country. So that building a new
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 where farmers learn how to manage water resources is necessary. In the
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 will provide farmers with the most advanced tools and techniques for farming so they can produce more food for people.
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, researchers can manipulate the genome of strategic plants
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 as wheat, rice and corn to make new plants with better characteristics. These new plants are more resistant to drought, diseases, pesticides and so forth. According to the latest researches which were published in well-known journals, genetically modified foods have more essential nutrients for people and children who consume them regularly are less prone to various ailments.
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 but not least, I think improvements in
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 has positive effects on our economy. Currently, most foods are imported from other countries and advances in
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 will save a huge amount of money. Taking all the aforementioned arguments into account, it can be concluded that developing a new
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 based on the reasons which I outlined above.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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