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Some people believe that success comes from hard work. Others think that it has to do with luck. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Give details and examples to support your opinion.

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Does progress only come from hard
work
 or is
luck
 the basis of everything? Some people believe that success comes from hard
work
,
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,
others think that it has to do with
luck
. I think that
luck
 can make the
life
 easier, but
work
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the work
 is hard being fundamental to get what you want. In
this
 essay I will analyse both viewpoints and
then
 give my opinion on the topic. It is said that to have progress you should
work
 hard the
first
 reason why is because a good preparation is the only thing that we can do to get something from
life
 and If you just wait for
luck
 to arrive you will never achieve your goal.There are lots of athletes and other famous people that were born in poor countries. Another example in
life
 is the school
,
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,
if you don't study you can never become a career man or woman. Even if you cannot always obtain excellent results you will always achieve good results with the commitment and you will be satisfied.
On the other hand
luck
 can always help, much times benefit is
also
 attributed to
luck
, fate still plays an important role in determining success, but only with it could it be short lived. Many people are known and successful only for being relatives of other famous family members and if you have important knowledge, economic possibilities, your career will be easier to achieve, but if you get what you want, as an important role in a society, thanks to
luck
 you will not be able to continue, because there will be no
luck
 sooner or later. In conclusion to have profited you should effort, even if sometimes
luck
 can upset your
life
. I believe that you can believe in
luck but
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luck, but
first
 you have to believe in yourself improve and make sacrifices.
Luck
 can be a good start, but
then
 you will have to
work
 hard to maintain your success, is better to
do not
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do, not
 trust it because if it changes you would be deceived and it is
therefore
 better to fight with your own strength.
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