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Today it is common for many business meeting and business training to take place online. Do the advantages of this new development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 modern era, technology becomes an essential part of our life. Nowadays, majority of client meetings and sessions are taking place on the internet.
Although
 Online meetings have some minor disadvantages like no face-to-face communication and deepens on machinery, It has many advantages
such
 as
time
 or cost saving and global connectivity. In my opinion, its positive impacts outweigh the negatives.
To begin
 with, In online conversation there is no person to person talk and due to
this
 sometime we miss real communication and get distracted from the real topic.
Secondly
, in virtual meetings, we need to depend a lot on technology
such
 as high bandwidth internet connection, various software like Skype, Zoom. Most of these are not available in rural areas and due to
this
 sometime we need to cancel or postpone the meeting. To exemplify, high bandwidth connection is very difficult to get in rural areas.
On the other hand
, online talk has many advantages.
Firstly
, it saves lots of
time
 and money. For face to face conversation, an owner need to visit to client, which cost him
time
 and wealth.
Although
, by using electronically connected meetings, a person can save both. Another essential point is, online meeting gives a method to connect globally. The tutor does not need to think much about the target audiences location, which is a drawback in physical meeting where tutor need to travel. To conclude, In my opinion, saving
time
 and money is essential. There is no doubt that in physical online connected meetings have some small disadvantages where people distract from the real conversation and dependency on technology, but it has various advantages
such
 as save lots of
time
 and money and no need to worry about target audiences location. In my view, its positives outweigh the negatives.
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