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Many small, local shops are closing as they are unable to compete with large supermarkets in the area. How does this effect local communities? How could this situation be improved?

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Increasing the popularity of the malls creates a competitive retail for the local shops and some of the shops are shutting down without able to withstand the competition. Normally, the big supermarkets have a huge financial background that they can knock out any of the small shops of the advertise. In
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, the closing of local shops which results in the jobless citizens, is not a positive improvement in our
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. As the number of jobless citizens increases, there will have a decrease in the number of taxpayers, which will, in turn, affect the economics of a country.
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, since the advertise is solely controlled by the supermarkets, they can monopolize the price of the product and the community will suffer from it. There are two methods to support locally based stores, an important part of
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 of all, authorities should implement a tax blueprint for companies with different incomes to balance the competition.
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 encourage the banks to promote a special loan theory for local shops as a long-term financial support so that supermarkets cannot easily eliminate the local stores. To conclude,
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 the popularity of supermarkets cannot be denied, local, small, convenient stores are still playing an important role in
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, the government need to protect them by creating a tax theory and special loan blueprint for a balanced display of the
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