A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend some money Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regards to the feedback that you asked
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your funding plan. On behalf of the local
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I thank you for your contribution to our area
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, spending money on building our local children's sports team has many advantages. Our children will get a chance to become a professional and could play for our nation in future. While sporting keeps our people fit, it will
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teach them discipline.
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, they will become better citizens. I came to know that you
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have an idea about paying for two concerts.
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could bring our people together and provide them
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opportunity to socialize.
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, we could take some time off from our busy
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and enjoy the music and relax for a while. I appreciate your initiative to sponsor
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our society. I believe are contributing to a Child’s future is more important than entertainment. I think you should spend on
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physical recreational activity.
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hope you
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a wise decision
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faithfully

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