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Some people are of the view that students should keep a gap of one year without study between school and university. While others think it affects learning. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion by giving relevant reasons and examples.

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Nowadays, many young people take a
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 off for travel or job before commencing with their tertiary education. Some section of the society is in favour of
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phenomenon, whereas
 others believe it as a disruptive process.
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 essay will elucidate both views. I strenuously reckon that youngsters should continue with their
study which
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study, which
 would not only benefit them in the long
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run, but
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 help them to secure good jobs in the future. On the one hand, those who favour taking break immediately after high school,
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believing
 that students gain valuable experiences in
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 when they travel and explore the world.
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 to say, whenever the youths face any kind of problems they learn to deal with it.
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 not only gives them the experience to deal with tough situations later in
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 but
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 gives them confidence.
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, a recent survey conducted by the Times group states that nearly 45 per cent of the students prefer to take a break and gain work experience before they start with their graduation.
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, a
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 break will give the student a chance to indulge in his or her desired activities. Understandably, the schedule in some high schools consumes most of the
students
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students'
 time, which could have been spent on relaxation or hobbies. On the other side of the argument, many students returning from a break in academic study find it very difficult to adjust to university
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, give up their ideas of higher education altogether, or waste their gap
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 in worthless activities. They
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 might get attracted to the lavish lifestyles and prefer to adopt obnoxious habits.
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, almost 20 per cent of university students in the United States of America find it hard to clear their degrees due to the lack of concentration.
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, it is observed that many of these youngsters when becoming financially independent do not prefer to join the university back.
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,
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 greediness among them makes them work
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 in
life
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 which ultimately becomes an obstacle in their career. To conclude, albeit
year
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 gap can be considered as an important aspect for the students, I firmly opine that the drawbacks
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 as
inclination
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an inclination
 towards bad habits and even discontinuation of studying should
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 be kept in mind.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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