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Some people think the increasing use of computers and mobile phones has a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, computers and mobile phones have become indispensable tools in everyday life, especially among young people.
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 some argue that their increasing use harms youngsters’ reading and writing skills, I agree that
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 trend has brought negative consequences, despite a few undeniable benefits. On the one hand, digital devices can contribute positively to young people’s literacy development. Online resources
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 as e-books and educational apps expose learners to a wide range of texts, allowing them to practise reading in an engaging way.
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, typing essays or assignments on computers can improve writing speed and give students access to advanced editing tools.
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, grammar-checking software can help learners identify their mistakes and improve accuracy over time. In
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 sense, technology has the potential to complement traditional learning methods.
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, I strongly believe that the disadvantages outweigh these benefits. Excessive reliance on auto-correction and predictive text functions means that students often fail to develop spelling and grammar awareness.
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, digital reading tends to encourage skimming rather than deep reading. When young people scroll quickly through online articles or social media posts, they rarely analyse ideas in depth or appreciate the nuances of language.
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, their critical thinking and comprehension skills may weaken.
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, constant exposure to short messages and emojis can limit their ability to express ideas clearly in formal writing. In conclusion,
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 technology offers new opportunities for learning, its overuse has undeniably damaged the reading and writing abilities of many young people. To address
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, schools and parents should encourage a balance between digital tools and traditional practices, ensuring that essential literacy skills are not neglected.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first line and keep it to the end. End with a short restatement of your view.
coherence
Use clear links between ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea that fits the last one.
coherence
Balance the ‘on the one hand’ and ‘on the other hand’ parts and end with a view that fits the start.
linguistic accuracy
Keep grammar clear. Long sentences can be split into two or three easy lines.
lexical resource
Use more common words. Avoid too much hard talk. Vary verbs but keep simple words.
content
Give a short example for each big idea to make your point strong.
task response
The essay has a clear view that is kept through most parts.
coherence
There are clear paragraphs with good links.
content
Reasoning is easy to follow and the ideas fit well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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