The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tabular chart and
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illustrate the number of
visitors
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to the Ashdown
Museum
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and the results of visitor satisfaction before and after refurbishment. During the year before
renovation
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the renovation
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, the total number of
visitors
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to the
museum
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was 74,000 where the majority percentage of the
people
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were dissatisfied and
one
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in 10 was very dissatisfied. In the meantime, less than a
third
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of
visitors
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satisfied
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,
where
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less than a fifth of
people
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were highly satisfied.
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,
one
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in twenty
of
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visitors
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had no review of
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museum
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, which was the lowest of all categories. During the year after replenishment, the total sum of
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had increased by about 18 thousand where the most figure of
people
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satisfied
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and more than a
third
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of
people
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were more satisfied. After reopening, the rate of dissatisfaction and very dissatisfaction
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decreased drastically when a few numbers of
people
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about
one
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in twenty were dissatisfied.
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,
one
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in twenty
people
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had no comment about the
museum
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even
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after a restoration that remained constant before
furnished
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being furnished
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, third".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum, people, one with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refurbishment
  • Satisfaction level
  • Appeal
  • Offerings
  • Survey
  • Correlation
  • Proportion
  • Pre-refurbishment
  • Post-refurbishment
  • Visitor experience
  • Dissatisfied
  • Visitor engagement
  • Survey methodology
  • Overall trend
  • Impact
  • Attract
  • Please
  • Museums
  • Analysis
  • Shifts
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