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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THEY SHOULD KEEP ALL THE MONEY THEY HAVE EARNED AND SHOULD NOT PAY TAX TO THE STATE. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE ?

#people #money #tax
Nowadays,
government
impose
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imposes
lavied
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levies
levied
la vied
 taxes and heavy duties on citizens.
In
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At
this
 stage, many civilians think that they do not need to pay
such
 fees and save it. I totally disagree with the notion. My supportive ideas and inclinations are elucidated in upcoming text. The
first
 and foremost reason to pay taxes is to steer
government
 fund. If governing bodies have
such
 money, they can make some alteration in the
city
 and state, which will be indirectly benefit us. To illustrate, Gujarat
government
 charge fees
on
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for
 road services and their citizens got the best migration amenities than the others like
city
 buses, smooth road infrastructures, metro rails, and many more.
Secondly
, they can serve the living human beings by catering free medicines, cheap foods, and make crime free
city
 by enrolling many security guards by collecting it.
Moreover
,
city
 services, which are each and everyone utilize it in direct of indirect ways, are organised and run by the
government
. If we
can not
can not
cannot
 pay any charges, how it will run
by
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with
 them
!
Accept space
!
 To exemplify, emergency service 108 is
running
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run
 by the central authority of India, if we will not pay, we have no right to demand and utilize it. But, because of corruption and greediness of high authority officers, some argue to pay it. The main reason is our huge amount of money piled up in their cupboard’s corner. Right now, in many rural areas have no electricity, roads and water so far. So, it is not essential to pay taxes, even they have not any rights to obligate us. To sum up, there are some misuse and lack of security of public fund so,
laymens
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laymen's
laymen
 denied to pay,
although
 without paying it, we could not get
such
 a great facilities ever.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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