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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
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The given chart shows data about changes in the
prices
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 of
houses
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 in two periods, 1990-1995 and 1996-2002 compared to the
prices
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od
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of
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 1989. As we can see in the graph, the
prices
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 of
the
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apply
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house got down
during
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from
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 1990 to 1995 in Tokyo, New
York
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 and
London
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while
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 the
prices
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 increased
during
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from
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 1996 to 2002 in New
York
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 and
London
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 compared to the
prices
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 of those
houses
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 in 1989.
According to
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 the graph,
during
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from
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 1990 to 1995 the
prices
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 of
houses
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 in Frankfurt and Madrid increased by 2-3
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percent
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per cent
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while
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 in the same
period
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,period
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 the
prices
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 decreased in
London
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, Tokyo and New
York
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 by 5-8
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percent
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per cent
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 compared to those
houses
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 in 1989. It is interesting that
during
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from
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 1996 to 2002, the
prices
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 in all cities
expect
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except
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 Frankfurt increased. The
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prices
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price
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 increase of
houses
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were
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was
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 11
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percent
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per cent
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 in
London
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, 5
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percent
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per cent
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 in New
York
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 and 4
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percent
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per cent
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 in Madrid compared to 1989. Only in Frankfurt, the
prices
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 decreased
in
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from
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 1996 to 2002.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, houses, york, london, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • suburb
  • metropolitan
  • trend
  • appreciation
  • depreciation
  • residential market
  • housing bubble
  • real estate
  • economic factors
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • property value
  • inflation-adjusted
  • comparative analysis
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