The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
The given chart shows data about changes in the
prices
of
houses
in two periods, 1990-1995 and 1996-2002 compared to the
prices
od
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of
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1989. As we can see in the graph, the
prices
of
the
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house got down
during
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from
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1990 to 1995 in Tokyo, New
York
and
London
while
the
prices
increased
during
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from
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1996 to 2002 in New
York
and
London
compared to the
prices
of those
houses
in 1989.
According to
the graph,
during
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1990 to 1995 the
prices
of
houses
in Frankfurt and Madrid increased by 2-3
percent
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per cent
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while
in the same
period
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the
prices
decreased in
London
, Tokyo and New
York
by 5-8
percent
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per cent
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compared to those
houses
in 1989. It is interesting that
during
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1996 to 2002, the
prices
in all cities
expect
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except
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Frankfurt increased. The
prices
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price
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increase of
houses
were
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was
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11
percent
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per cent
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in
London
, 5
percent
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per cent
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in New
York
and 4
percent
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per cent
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in Madrid compared to 1989. Only in Frankfurt, the
prices
decreased
in
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from
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1996 to 2002.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, houses, york, london, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • suburb
  • metropolitan
  • trend
  • appreciation
  • depreciation
  • residential market
  • housing bubble
  • real estate
  • economic factors
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • property value
  • inflation-adjusted
  • comparative analysis
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