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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
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Nowadays, there is a big issue that many people don't know how to become a good
person
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 in the society. It is undeniable that some people think that they should teach their children well. Though, some group of people still think that teaching their kid to be a good
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 should be the
school
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 task. From my point of view, teaching someone to be a great
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 of the country should be both parents and
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 job, Both are described in the following paragraph. Children have to go to
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 to learn educational things and how to be surviving in the society to socialize with their friends and teachers.
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, their parents should teach them how to well behaved to another
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 in society. The little thing that they should know when they were very young,
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 as learning that they have to apologize when they are doing something wrong. That should be their parent responsibility.
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, there are a lot of things that the children could not learn or study from their home.
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, how behave and understand the
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 rule and knowing that if they done something really bad they will get the punishment from the
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.
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 significant
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 should the teacher job to deal with them. To conclude, Both
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schools
 and parents have the responsibility to teach a child to be a great
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. They have different
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 to do with
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 issue. Though, it is nearly to be the same, but it's different. We need both to teach the student how to be a
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 with needed behaviour. It cannot be just the parent
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 or the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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