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It is sad that life is becoming increasingly stressful for most people. What is the reason of this phenomenon and how could this problem be solved?

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It is a very popular practice in the modern society to order ready-made
food
 from restaurants, rather than cooking at
home
. The main reasons for
such
 a tendency may be cheap prices in some restaurants and people’s desire to save some
time
from
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for
 cooking. Even though ordering
food
 have some obvious advantages, its disadvantages should not be underestimated. On the one hand, ordering prepared
food
 may be the best choice for a busy person, who does not have
time
 for cooking and cleaning. Cooking
food
 at
home
 requires a considerable amount of
time,
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time, moreover, the
moreover
 the cleaning process may take even more
time
 and resources than cooking itself.
For example
, cooking a simple dish
such
 as chicken with rice and
home
 requires significant amounts of water and electricity for electrical appliances
such
 as the oven and dishwasher.
Hence
, having an opportunity to order cooking from a restaurant will save a lot of
time
, electricity and water.
On the other hand
, delegating the process of cooking to some restaurant have a dramatic disadvantage of not having the information about the ingredients used in the meals. With high demand, grow the volumes of required products, which sometimes can affect the quality of
purchased
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purchasing
 produce.
For example
, it is a very common practice in some restaurants to make salads from products that are about to go bad and mask the rotten scent by adding some chemicals and spices.
Hence
, some restaurants may use poor quality products or chemicals for boosting taste and preservatives, which may have a negative effect on the customer’s health in the long run. In conclusion, ordering
food
 from restaurants may be a tempting choice for people who have no
time
 for cooking at
home
, but
this
 approach has a critical
disadvantage of being not
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disadvantage of not being
 informed about the ingredients used in the meal, which can have destructive consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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