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Many feel that happiness is mainly an individual responsibility while others feel that there are important external factors. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#happiness #responsibility #factors
Happiness is something we could feel
from
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for
about
 all the things that we
made
engage in
did
 in
life
. It's either bad or good for as long as it makes our heart to smile.It seems
obviously
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obvious
 that we are happy in whatever we do in
life
. People said
happines
state of well-being characterized by emotions ranging from contentment to intense joy
happiness
 is limited and need an important factor for us
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 happy. In my own opinion, the idea is wrong
because for me we
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for me because we
 don'
t
 need anything just to feel that we are happy.
Secondly
, the external factor that we need is love because,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly believe if we really love what we are doing. There's no reason why we shouldn'
t
 be happy.
Lastly
, happiness is a choice but never please anybody just to make your
life
 happy, maybe there are times that we need the comfort and sympathy of other people, most especially when we are in need. But it doesn'
t
 mean that you will be practicing it just to make our lives happy. Always place
your self
reflexive form of "you"
yourself
 to something or someone who can give you the meaning of happiness. To end
this
 essay, happiness is everywhere. We can'
t
 control ourselves to do the things what makes us happy. There
is
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are
 no certain requirements for it. Just live your
life
 to the fullest.

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