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Some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news events. Do you think advantage of technology outweigh the disadvantages.

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Technology has revolutionized the world with abundance of breakthrough.
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, people have numerous options to communicate with their close ones and news dissemination become more acute than ever. In my opinion, there is no doubt technology has lots of favour rather drawbacks.
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 with, Technology has shrunk the way of contact area. Where it used to take at least a month to exchange conversation, Nowadays, it's only a matter of one touch of the screen to reach anyone in the world. Specifically, anti-social people ascertain alternatives to be in a touch frequently. One perfect example is, Facebook and Instagram. People can be
uptodate
reflecting the latest information or changes
up-to-date
 with their friend and relatives on
instagram
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 and going through
Facebook feed
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the Facebook feed
 aware them about current events of the universe. On the flip side, most of the people become lazy and indulge in several things like web browsing. Spending time playing games on mobile phones and streaming funny videos have removed the bridge between people.
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, people prefer to call their known one
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 of visiting them.
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, resilience of Social Media lead to a
plat
the upper surface of the mouth that separates the oral and nasal cavities
palate
plot
pilot
foarm
the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
form
forms
 of fault
news which
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news, which
 always prove to
drivert
the operator of a motor vehicle
drivers
 mind. At
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,
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,
 social gathering got eliminated at immense numbers from the markets because
accurance
an event that happens
occurrences
 of the online shopping unlike a past days when people used to visit
these place
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this place
these places
 for fun. To conclude,
Technilogy pushing
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technology, pushing
technology pushing
human-kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humankind
 toward greater possibilities and innovation.

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