In many countries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved?

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Nowadays, the internet society is advancing notably, and belong, we could get about medical technically information easily. I think that they are in something

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situations if they could not choose to live in healthy ways. I assumed two reasons that they choose to live in unhealthy ways.

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, they are poor or live in developing countries, many country's poverty is increasing. They do not afford to go to hospital or to buy medication when they catch a sick.

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, they cannot eat enough foods and drink water

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polluted,

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they are exposed to starvation

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accelerated an unhealthy. Their environments are

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dirty even in hospital if they could get a medical examination. The hospital cannot supply good or clean treatment to people. Poverty people do not have any choice that chooses to live a healthy way for themselves. I think that developing country could receive a support from WHO, NPO and WFP. In individual

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an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition

sports

, we would donate clothes, shoes, notes and to contribute.

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one of solutions for helping them.

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, I have suggested that people do not have properly acknowledged about medicine or tend to wrong approach, because of a religion, culture and developing medicines. In

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, I think that the government should support for them,

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, they provide a school tuition and developing education, to build a school and cover medical experiment fees.

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, if the

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belongs to culture or religion, it is difficult to change or fix their mind

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believed. Because culture has a long history and religion is habit of them for a long time. Protecting their mind,

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teach

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can live more healthy approach to them are important. In conclusion, it needs to know the cause that they choose to live unhealthy style,

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think a solution to each

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. I think that's a correct acknowledge and maintained surroundings are necessary for living in healthy.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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6 paragraphs

324 words

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In many countries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved?

Fully explain your ideas

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In some countries, more and more people are becoming, interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people resarch this?

Social media has replaced the traditional method of communicating and people use more and more of social media to communicate and follow news and events. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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