Topic: The maps show the changes of a community center 10 years ago and until the present.

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The maps illustrate the developments which have occurred in a civic

center

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centre

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for 10 years. In general, the community

center

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centre

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in the present is repurposed than 10 years ago .

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the maps, the building had a few structures before it changes

considerately

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considerably

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. First, to the north of the hall, the toilet has been added, making the storage

room

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shrink by half.

Moreover

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, there is a disappearance of the garden in the west,

which

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has

then

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been replaced by an indoor sports area.

Also

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, four office rooms and the storage

room

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in the east of the hall have been cleared to make

room

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for a coffee area.

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while

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the working range has been relocated to the original location of the coffee place, the storage

room

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has been completely destroyed.

On the other hand

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, the 100-seat hall, which is the biggest space, has remained unchanged over the

ten year

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ten-year

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period.

Finally

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, the entrance and reception

field

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fields

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in the south and the southeast of the building have shown no change.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

170 words

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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

some university students want to learn about other subjects in additioon to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Governments should not financially support artists (like painters, writers, musicians, etc.) because arts do not improve people's lives. Instead, they should let artists support themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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