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The chart illustrates estimated maximum population of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004

The chart illustrates estimated maximum population of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004
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The bar chart provides information about the estimated maximum population of Asian
elephants
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 from 1997 to 2004.
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, high rate of
elephants
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 in India in both years when
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the graph
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 hits a
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 in China. In 1997,
elephants
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 are more than
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in 2004 approximately 10000
species
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 in India.
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, in Malaysia's
elephants
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 in 1997, 3000
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, but
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 dramatically decreased by one
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 to 1000
species
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 in 2004.
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, in
China
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this
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 dropped by half,
1000
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from 1000
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species
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 to 500. Other countries'
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elephants
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elephant's
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population
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populations
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 changed significantly.
Elephants
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 in 1997 are much more than in 2004
all
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 countries. Some countries remained relatively unchanged. Vietnam in 2004 is the same in Laos around 1000
species
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.
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The estimated
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 maximum population of
elephants
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 have some fluctuations in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words elephants, species with synonyms.
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