The chart illustrates estimated maximum population of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004

The chart illustrates estimated maximum population of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004
The bar chart provides information about the estimated maximum population of Asian
elephants
from 1997 to 2004.
Overall
, high rate of
elephants
in India in both years when
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hits a
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in China. In 1997,
elephants
are more than
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in 2004 approximately 10000
species
in India.
However
, in Malaysia's
elephants
in 1997, 3000
species
, but
this
dramatically decreased by one
thirds
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to 1000
species
in 2004.
Also
, in
China
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this
dropped by half,
1000
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species
to 500. Other countries'
elephants
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population
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changed significantly.
Elephants
in 1997 are much more than in 2004
all
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countries. Some countries remained relatively unchanged. Vietnam in 2004 is the same in Laos around 1000
species
.
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The estimated
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maximum population of
elephants
have some fluctuations in both years.

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