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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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The chart gives information about how much
money
 earned from
exporing
inquire into
exploring
exporting
 in several items in a country in the two years (2015 and 2016) and units were measured in
billon
the number that is represented as a one followed by 9 zeros
billion
billions
 dollars. The table chart illustrates the
percentage
 change in
values
Suggestion
the values
 of each product of exports in 2016, compared with 2015. Overall, almost the items in 2016 had the highest amount of
money
 than that in 2015 except engineered products. Simultaneously, the categories related to textiles had the highest
percentage
 of
increase
 from 2015 to 2016.
First
 of all, there
was
Suggestion
were
 about 72
billion
dollars which
Accept comma addition
dollars, which
was gained
Suggestion
were gained
 from exporting petroleum products in 2016,
this
 figure was higher than that in 2015 (around 61
billion
 dollars). Meanwhile, the amount of
money
 earned in 2016 still was higher than that in 2015 in exporting engineered goods with around 61 billowing dollars and nearly 58
billon
the number that is represented as a one followed by 9 zeros
billion
 dollars respectively.
In contrast
, there was a distinctive difference from two previous items that the number of
money
 earned in 2015 was higher than that in 2016 in exporting gems and jewellery with almost 42
billion
 dollars and nearly 41 dollars.
In addition
, the amount of
money
 earned in both 2015 and 2016
year
Suggestion
years
 had about the same figure with around 31
billion
 dollars in agricultural products.
Moreover
, around 26
billion
 dollars and almost 31
billion
 dollars were the number of
money
 earned in exporting
textiles
Suggestion
textile
 goods in 2015 and 2016 year
respec
.
Secondly
, the
percentage
 change in almost categories tended to
increase
 from 2015 to 2016 excluded gems and jewellery goods. Specially,
textiles
Suggestion
textile
 goods had the highest
percentage
 change in 2016 compared to 2015
with
Suggestion
to
 15.24 percent, while there was
inly
and nothing more
only
 0.
81%
Suggestion
A 81 % increase
increase
 belonged to agricultural products. The petroleum products and engineered goods had the
increase
percentage
 with 3% and 8.5
% respectively
Accept comma addition
%, respectively
.
Finally
, the
percentage
 of gems and jewellery items decreased 5.18 percent in 2016 compared to 2015.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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