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Qualities a person needs to be successful can’t be learnt in university or in similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's modern society, we need to equip ourselves with a huge fund of knowledge in order to achieve success. While I cannot deny that the understandings of the university provides very rewarding, I agree with the statement that achieving success needs several qualities, a few of which cannot be learnt in academic institutions.
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 with, individuals cannot become successful if they only have academic knowledge. Take
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, those who graduated from universities with high results, but they couldn’t get a job because of their lack of experiences. For other examples, the CEO of Microsoft – Bill Gates, who quitted the Harvard University, developed leadership qualities from his own experiences. Actually the insights provided by the universities focus on theoretical issues which hardly come in real life.
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, there are some skills which are essential to succeed, but can’t be learned in school but in real life.
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, the differences between theory and practice are so large that we are likely to get into troubles.
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, many people can become successful without going to colleges. Business people who have inborn intelligence and
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 hard work will lead to their achievement. As we all know Michael Dell who is the founder of Dell left school at 19. But what is more shocking is he started his computer company in his college dorm room, he had worked very hard, and he
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 had to use up his savings and expenses, even his family’s loan to maintain his progress and to get the results he has now. In additional, for those who aspire to succeed in sports or entertainment, the natural abilities and luck accounted for a large proportion. If you are invited to be a guest from the reality show
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, it is possible for you to be well known and from that you will become more famous and due to your success.
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, Cristiano Ronaldo - the best football player in the world and widely regarded as one of the greatest players of all time
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By age 14, Ronaldo believed he had the ability to play semi-professionally, and agreed with his mother to cease his education in order to focus entirely on football
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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