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The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as rich people become richer and poor people grow poorer. What problems could this situation cause? What are the solutions to address those problems?

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Nowadays, it is observed that the difference of wealth between affluent and poor people has increased dramatically.
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 can lead to slow
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 in the economy as well as jump in crime rate.
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,
education
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 and training programs can help resolve
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 issue. To start with, economic
growth
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 of a country is dependant on supply and demand. As the gap between the rich and poor is widening, people will have no jobs and the consumption of the products will decrease.
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, the local shop owners will not make money, if the people in their locality have less buying power.
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, more and more people will be involved in high crime, which will affect the country.
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, vandalism, human trafficking and prostitution can rise in the country and the
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 of the economy can be
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 slowed down. To solve the above problems, governments should take necessary steps.
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, one initiative can be to provide
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 for free. Not only
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 the study materials should be provided, which can eventually lead to more educated people.
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, teaching skills to people who require a job in a particular industry can be of great importance. These skilled training institutes need to be a primary source for
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 looking for a job. In Conclusion,
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 the difference between the rich and poor is increasing, which is leading to slow economic
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 rate and high crime rates.
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 can be taken care by proposing solution like
education
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 and skilled training programs.

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