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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

#teenagers #lives #generations
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Recently, the
internet
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 has advanced more than previous. The
internet
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 is available to connect the person who lives in all over the world and to get any data easily whatever you want. I agree that today's
teenager
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 is more stressful than previous generation's teenagers. The main reason why I agree with the opinion that a
teenager
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 is stressful than before who live in the
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 society. The
teenager
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 lives in there and spending most of a day.
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 is because, the
internet
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 is increasing available to connect with people even you have never met or never heard a voice. If you could contact with the people and talk lots,
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 you may have likely an illusion as a reliable person. Sometimes, a convenience is helpful us and necessary to our lives, but
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 that might be likely to be lonely and stressful.
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, the relationship may not be longer or unsuitable.
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, to distinguish right or wrong information is arduous for
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 even for adults. In the
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 society is spreading a
rumor
gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
rumour
, exaggerated advertisements and word of mouth. The information is written by anonymous people that could be unreliable and easy to fix to someone. The processing enormous amount of information is suffering for them and have to care about
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 fraud. Their fraud is a clever deception and unclear. In conclusion, I believe that nowadays
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 must be stressful in
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internet
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 society than the previous generation. To recognize real or unreal world is difficult and obviously stressful to them.
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