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Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more schoolwork. How do you think children should spend their free time?

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Nowadays, With the increase in technology, children's lives are very simple. Some people believe that children have so much free
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 and from that they feel, They shall be used
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 leisure
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 to do more
schoolwork
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. But, From my point of view, There are so many activities which they prefer in their free
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. Personally, I believe that in
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, They play any sports to active themselves too.
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, Children spent their 5-7 hours in a school.
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, They use their free
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 to practice more
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. From that, They connect themselves with these
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 daily.
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, Some parents believe that, If their children are only studying whole day, they are doing great in their exams and getting top rank in their academic
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, They excel in some sports which they have an interest
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 as, Tennis, Basketball, Football, Cricket and many more. Apart from that, They
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 do art and craft
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, Sketches, Canvas Painting and a lot more. From that, They shall have active themselves and
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 feel relaxed and happy apart from the
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, In
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 free
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, They follow their hobby and their skills which are helpful themselves.
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, They explore
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 free
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 in book reading for gaining knowledge, which makes them different from the others. I am not against to spend
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 with
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schoolwork but
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schoolwork, but
 these activities are
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 important to growth and development themselves. To conclude, I totally agree with my statements that, They have used their whole free
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 apart from the school
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 and doing same productive
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 too, which makes them happy and from that they fit, active and gain knowledge from that. I completely agree with my decision on
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