IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

The diagram below explains the process of making wood pellets, used to heat building

The diagram below explains the process of making wood pellets, used to heat building
The diagram illustrates the process by which the wood
pellets
Use synonyms
 are manufactured for using heat building
overall
Linking Words
,the wood
pellets
Use synonyms
 are manufactured
by
Change preposition
in
show examples
 eight stages, starting with the derived of
sawdust
Use synonyms
 and ending with the packaging of
pellets
Use synonyms
 into
8 kilo
Add a hyphen
8-kilo
show examples
 bags To start with, the
sawdust
Use synonyms
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
 arrived from
sawmill
Correct article usage
the sawmill
show examples
 after that to convert
sawdust
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
into
show examples
 uniform length it is hammered into
fibers
Change the spelling
fibres
show examples
.Following that the
sawdust
Use synonyms
 is converted into
fibers
Change the spelling
fibres
show examples
 and
then
Linking Words
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
dampened with steam.The
fibers
Change the spelling
fibres
show examples
 are forced by holes in a pellet machine
utill
Correct your spelling
until
it
Correct pronoun usage
they
show examples
 converted
in
Change preposition
into
show examples
pellets
Use synonyms
 After these stages, the
pellets
Use synonyms
is send
Change the verb form
is sent
is sending
show examples
 to   cooled and dust is removed from
pellets
Use synonyms
 by using
vacuumed
Change the form of the verb
vacuum
show examples
.Eventually,
pellets
Use synonyms
 are ready for packed into 18
killo
Correct your spelling
kilo
kills
 bags and send
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
for sale

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
▼
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words pellets, sawdust with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: