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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion

#money #time
Majority
Suggestion
The majority
 of people like to spend their most
time
 earn more money and spend less leisure on other activities, on the flip side, many individuals like to
spemd
pass time in a specific way
spend
 their tile on pastime activities and earn less cash.In my
opinion both
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opinion, both
 views
has
Suggestion
have
 their own positive or negative aspects
,
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,
but spending more
time
 to collect more cash, is better for bright future. To commence with
,
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,
people can buy anything according to their need by their salary and they have no worry about to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their desires.
For instance
,
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,
Individuals have more coin they can buy more things like clothes
,
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,
foodstuff, luxury things.
Moreover
,
humanbeings
Suggestion
human beings
 feel secure when they spend more
time
 on collecting money without waste their
time
 on other activities.
On the other hand
, many people love to spend their
time
 with their relatives or loved ones and masses feel more
relax
Suggestion
relaxed
.
Imdividuals
Suggestion
Individuals
 have more
satisifaction
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
 with less wages and they
alwayes
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
 like to spend their
time
 to experience different things.
For example
, people who have less monthly salary they have spirit to
exmine
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
examine
 more thing and ready to go on vacations on different location to relax their mind. To sum up, I believe that money
can not
can not
cannot
 buy happiness unsure it will give financial support to
humanbeing
Suggestion
human being
,
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,
but people can not give rest to their mind due to their busy
scheudle
plan for an activity or event
schedule
schedules
 so it
is depends
Suggestion
depends
has depended
 on people how they manage their
time
.
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  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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