You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Buying on the
internet
have seen
tremendous increase
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a tremendous increase
tremendous increases
in from 2010. We have
this
cultural as well as
mindset shift
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a mindset shift
the mindset shift
in the consumer
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
with increase in
number
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the number
of companies focusing on consumer convenience. Ranging from categories of products for kids like books, toys, even diapers to
product
categories luring adults like latest phones.
accesories
clothing that is worn or carried, but not part of your main clothing
Accessories
Accesories
,
clothes etc.
Accept comma addition
clothes, etc.
are
Suggestion
Are
available on the fingertip of the consumer. Thanks to globalization.
product
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Product
delivery and pricing are
also
tools for e-commerce companies to lure consumers. Other than e-commerce whole plethora of
product
options
are
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is
available online for sale, air tickets, movie tickets, online food, holiday vacations are few to count. Who would have imagined that house rentals as well as
house
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the house
itself will be sold on the
internet
. Still buying a car on the
internet
surprises me.
Also apart
Accept comma addition
Also, apart
from the physical goods, many
internet
companies have mastered selling experiences on the
internet
. Take
for example
, Facebook
have
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has
mastery in collecting data and selling the products via target marketing. Data, here comes the big word. Knowingly/unknowingly we are feeding data to these
internet
companies on a daily basis if not hourly basis.
This
data helps
internet
companies
to analyse
Suggestion
analyse
and sell more items relevant to us or rather say more items relevant to our
internet
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
This
data analysis is helpful for companies and up to
certain extent
Suggestion
a certain extent
to us
also
. But more of data feeding to these companies can be harmful for the individual as it
track
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tracked
and analyse every movement of them on the
internet
.
Other
Suggestion
Another
important point which should be checked by
user
Suggestion
the user
, while buying online, is
quality
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the quality
of the
product
. Comments:

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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