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First Impressions are important. Some people think that doing well in interview is the key to securing a goog job. TO what extend do you agree?

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Some people believe, that performing extraordinarily in
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job
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 interview is the key to securing employment, because, initial impressions are essential to impress the interviewer. I completely disagree with
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 statement, because securing a
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 needs hard
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 and dedication,
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this
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,
one
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 should have the
skills
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 required for the
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 continuation. I will explain my views
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 with relevant examples. The foremost reason to disagree with the statement is that
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 people can get a
job
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 based on their qualifications and confidence in an interview.
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, if they lack the
skills
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 required for the
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,
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 they cannot
work
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 in the same organization for long.
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 is because, to continue working in an organisation,
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 should know, how to complete the given tasks.
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 , nowadays, most
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the
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companies evaluate the performance of their employees, so that they can assess, who is fulfilling the requirements.
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,
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 of my friends,
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was selected for a teaching
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, based on her education and interview,
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 after
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 month, she was asked to resign, as her teaching
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 were not up to their standards.
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, to continue working in any field, the individual should
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 hard and show dedication towards his
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, because if anyone has the required
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 and qualifications, but still fails to satisfy the higher authorities
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 poor performance, so he will be terminated. To illustrate, my sister was selected to
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 in a multinational company, but
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 her punctuality issues, and non-serious attitude, she was removed from her service.
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, first impressions do play a significant role in getting employment.
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,
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 should have the capability,
skills
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 and dedication to secure their position
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on ensuring that each paragraph flows smoothly from one to the next. Consider using more linking words and phrases to enhance the essay's coherence.
Task Achievement
In the introduction, mention briefly what aspects of job skills and dedication you will cover in your essay. This will make the thesis clearer.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay clearly disagrees with the statement and provides a well-structured introduction and conclusion.
Task Achievement
Good use of relevant, specific examples to support the arguments, such as the friend's and sister's experiences.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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