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First Impressions are important. Some people think that doing well in interview is the key to securing a goog job. TO what extend do you agree?

#first #impressions #people #interview #goog #job
Some people believe, that performing extraordinarily in
an
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job
 interview is the key to securing employment, because, initial impressions are essential to impress the interviewer. I completely disagree with
this
 statement, because securing a
job
 needs hard
work
 and dedication,
besides
this
,
one
 should have the
skills
 required for the
job
 continuation. I will explain my views
further
 with relevant examples. The foremost reason to disagree with the statement is that
,
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 people can get a
job
 based on their qualifications and confidence in an interview.
However
, if they lack the
skills
 required for the
job
,
then
 they cannot
work
 in the same organization for long.
This
 is because, to continue working in an organisation,
one
 should know, how to complete the given tasks.
In addition
 , nowadays, most
of
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the
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companies evaluate the performance of their employees, so that they can assess, who is fulfilling the requirements.
For instance
,
one
 of my friends,
she
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was selected for a teaching
job
, based on her education and interview,
however
 after
one
 month, she was asked to resign, as her teaching
skills
 were not up to their standards.
Furthermore
, to continue working in any field, the individual should
work
 hard and show dedication towards his
job
, because if anyone has the required
skills
 and qualifications, but still fails to satisfy the higher authorities
due to
 poor performance, so he will be terminated. To illustrate, my sister was selected to
work
 in a multinational company, but
due to
 her punctuality issues, and non-serious attitude, she was removed from her service.
To conclude
, first impressions do play a significant role in getting employment.
However
,
one
 should have the capability,
skills
 and dedication to secure their position
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Coherence and Cohesion
Work on ensuring that each paragraph flows smoothly from one to the next. Consider using more linking words and phrases to enhance the essay's coherence.
Task Achievement
In the introduction, mention briefly what aspects of job skills and dedication you will cover in your essay. This will make the thesis clearer.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay clearly disagrees with the statement and provides a well-structured introduction and conclusion.
Task Achievement
Good use of relevant, specific examples to support the arguments, such as the friend's and sister's experiences.

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