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Many countries now face an economic downturn so it is better for each country to focus on its own problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Economy is one of the important factors for every
country
 to raise its bargaining position among countries in the world. When each
country
 has a great economy, the citizen of that
country
 mostly obtains state welfare.
Otherwise
, the
country
 impacted by global crises often looks difficulty to obtain their people from being poor.
Therefore
, every
country
 will concern
firstly
 itself to focus overcoming the problems, later on it will help other countries, of course with returning benefits to cash flow in future. To raise their economic growth, some of the countries at lease concern about three strategies to become developed countries. The
first
 strategy is a way to control the supply and demand of money, because the money supply has become high levels of impact will push Central State Bank
such
 as Bank Indonesia (BI) in Indonesia, FED in the United States, to find and solve problems until they will not become systematic problem effects. Controlling stability of currency is the
second
 strategy, as we know most countries in the world have different currency that dollar of America becomes standardization to them. And in the
last
 strategy is kind of methods to reduce inflation, it will be a serious problem if they do not focus on solving that problem. Sometimes, other countries support the poor
country
 to be out from the global crisis impact, but they never forget about the economic benefits in the future. In 1997's,
for example
, Indonesia had been impacted by serious global crises,
then
 some of countries
such
 as America help it to raise its economy by selling debt interest,
therefore
, the effect of selling debt interest is always depended on it.
Finally
, everyone reading
this
 essay will understand whom countries become poo
r anyone
Accept comma addition
anyone, on
on the contrary
, the developed countries always become healthy and well

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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