A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir, I am writing to express my appreciation in regard to your decision to sponsor a local junior sports
team
or alternatively arrange
two
open-air
concerts
. Undoubtedly, sponsoring the local junior sports
team
will be advantageous for both the
team
and the business. What is important is that they will be fully equipped with all necessary training stuff, and it will enhance their chance to win competitions with a prize pool of up to 1 million dollars. Considering that your business will become more lucrative, your brand will
also
be promoted simultaneously.
On the other hand
, arranging
two
open-air
concerts
will
also
bring to people
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immense pleasure and some bands would
also
get the chance to show their talents. It is extremely essential for our culture and legacy. I am completely confident that either of your initiatives will be beneficial for our society.
However
, I suppose that supporting the junior sports
team
will have a permanent result than organizing
two
open-air
concerts
with temporary effects. Emotions after
concerts
will be forgotten while the young sportsmen will become our pride at least for the
next
two
years. Once again thank you for
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excellent support. Yours faithfully, Kao Mao
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