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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working on its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months • say how your work could be done while you are away • asked by his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Jeremy
Phillipes
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Phillips
, I am writing with regard to working six months in the company’s main office which is situated in Canada. As I am managing the digital marketing role in Bangladesh, if I can get a chance to work there my experience will go to the next level. Not only that but
also
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 I can closely understand what the company's main goal is to promote so I can make a strategy based on it. In these six months, my co-worker Mr Tuhin will handle my responsibilities, as we already discussed. If there is more workload
then
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 Mr Junayed will help him to manage the task with him. As you are the country manager I would like to request
you
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that
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you
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apply by your end
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 they will take it seriously and
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approve it. You can add my performance report
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 the application. You are the only person who can arrange
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 opportunity for me. Kind Regards, Md Monirul Khan Haidher

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down longer sentences into shorter ones for better readability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and purpose to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The letter clearly addresses all parts of the task, providing explanations for each point.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and professional, suitable for communication with a manager.
coherence cohesion
The letter uses appropriate greetings and a formal closing, creating a good impression.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • global operations
  • cross-functional
  • remote work
  • progress updates
  • logistical arrangements
  • cultural exchange
  • continuity plan
  • enhance my skillset
  • broaden my horizons
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