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Band 7.5

Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas.

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Only local foods should be provided at supermarkets rather than foods from other countries. We all know that consuming our own goods makes the
country
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’s
economy
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 grow, but what if the
country
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 does not have enough ingredient for making a healthy meal, kids will not be served healthy meals? In my opinion, I think that every supermarket should provide a variety of ingredients and
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. Nowadays, there are many countries that cannot plant the vegetations, due to drought or unfavourable environment,
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 teenagers in those countries will have a lack of vitamins and other minerals.
This
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 situation is the most terrible thing that can happen all over the world, because children are
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 hundred percent of our future, if they do not enough minerals or proteins, these kids can easily get the disease.
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, youth in some part of the world is starving because their president does not believe that import
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 from other countries is significant, so they will be having only
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 that can produce in their environment,
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 as in some islands they eat Sadeen Fish every day, and
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 horrific.
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, in case of supermarket only provide local products, producers in that
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 will not be unemployed because they are the biggest and the only
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 who can deliver
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,
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 the
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 will never fall as long as there is no problem with producer,
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 if all sources are not able to be reaped, due to disasters, the whole
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 is going to run out of
food
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. To illustrate, there is a small
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 surrounding with forests, they hunt and harvest from the forests for their
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, the
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 is growing and keeps growing, unfortunately,
one
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 day in the forests are burnt by a fire disaster and take weeks to recover them, will they survive without
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 for the rest of the week? To conclude, if supermarkets sell only local
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, no
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ne can
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no, one
not guarantee that if there are enough nutrients for those local people or not,
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 the
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 will certainly raise.
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, I my point of view I think it is the best to provide a variety of
food
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 from all over the world in the supermarket.

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