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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

#quality #life #cities
Quality of
life
 represents how healthy human beings are living and how they are maintaining their living style, though it’s hard to believe that most living in the metropolitan cities people are getting rid of quality from their
life
 cycles. There is a number of causes and solution which we are going to discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. Dealing with these cause it has been observed that there are many issues which divert the human mind
nevertheless
 even force them to spend degraded
life
.
Firstly
, the Lifestyle of richest persons is one of the main influenced factors which generate tinkling in the mind of others to achieve these heights.
As a result
, people started giving more preference to money rather than to social
life
, it is
also
 observed that these citizens even don’t have
time
 for their family. There is an article published by Times magazine that a huge increase in people count has been observed those are living a
life
 under debt
that is
 provided either by banks or other independent firm just for fulfilling their materialistic dreams. There is one more concept turns out which states that the increased pressure of work schedule and target achievements of private companies affects the quality standard of the
life
 cycle of metropolitans,
hence
 they are getting away from their culture and family. What could be the situations can arise which act as the solution for these devastating issues?
Firstly
, proper planning in terms of finance has to be done by the family in together so they could lead a neat and tidy
life
 as well a kind concern for saving ought to be the
first
 preferences.
Secondly
,
time
 schedule could be a laborious task, but it always gives you eternal happiness if you got a free
time
 for oneself and family, even researchers believe that
this
time
 person can rejuvenate oneself from all the problems. Conclusively, I want to say that there is no doubt in a degraded
life
 of metropolitan citizens due to a fast pace and eager to earn more in less
time
, but
this
 could be manageable if proper planning has adopted by the person.
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