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Tourism is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries, but its disadvantages should not be overlooked. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, countries are developing
year
 by
year
 and that developments are compelling people to
travel
 more to other states and it is useful for countries
budget
 and
money
 which is collected from
tourism
 could use in medical and educational ways. I believe that
tourism
 has more benefits than drawbacks.
This
 essay will look at some aspects to justify my viewpoint. To start with, a number of tourists increased in many modern and historical countries after beginning technological century due to we can see that many countries reached a peak in development and it might cause to increase a
budget
 of
country
Suggestion
the country
a country
 whereas could impact negatively for their citizens' health. A corona virus can be a prime example, there was a high demand in Russian citizens that going to the Italy
last
 month due to there was a discount for some things
such
 as tickets and hotel prices decreased significantly
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 most some Russians preferred going there
as a result
 their some parts approximately 15% or 13 % came back to the Russian with a corona virus.Another drawback of
travel
 is that traditional customs might be lost due to tourists.Some local people stated that their traditional cultures are not suitable to the modern era, whereas cultures brought from tourists is more suitable and modern.
Then
 they try to learn another
country
's custom or their style of dresses
then
 they will forget their tradition
as a result
 local traditions might be lost step by step.
By contrast
, opponents of
this
 view point out that
tourism
 could increase a
country
's
budget
 significantly because every tourist spends approximately from 500 dollars to more than 5000 dollars in his or her
travel
 point. A
money which
Accept comma addition
money, which
 collected through
tourism
 could boost a
country
's educational system and development.
For example
, America is the best region to
travel
 in the world and every
year
 more than a million people come there for
travel
. We can see that USA earns a much
money
 via
tourism
 each
year
. It is crystal clear that American's university and medicine system are the best worldwide because USA spends more
money which
Accept comma addition
money, which
 collected through
tourism
 to these types of systems. In conclusion,
tourism
 has more benefits than drawbacks,
hence
, if countries give a more choice to come tourist. It will be more beneficial for their
budget
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