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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The process diagram depicts the stages of recycling
of
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aluminium
cans
. As an
overall
 assessment,
it is clear that
 the
cans
 collection is a main
stagestage
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stage stage
, whilst
the
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recycling is the
last
stage
 of the process. Now turning to the details, in the initial
stage
, used
cans
 are collected from a dumpster, and with the help of a collection truck recycled materials
transported
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 to the cleaning and sorting process.
Then
after
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, all materials are segregated in
cleaning
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 and compressing machine
on
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 a particular place, in the following
stage
 processed
cans
 are heated and melted in Melting Machine,
it
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 forms a liquid which is an important
stagestage
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stage stage
 of recycling.
In addition
 to
this
, the liquid is converted into
a
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an
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 aluminium sheet in a size of 2.5mm and
the
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a
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thickness of 6mm in
rolling
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the rolling
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stage
. In the subsequent
stage
, recycled
cans
 are prepared from aluminium
sheet
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sheets
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, and in the final
stage
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,stage
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 a beverage company in the UK used almost 75% of recycled
cans
 for their soft drink.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cans, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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