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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The process diagram depicts the stages of recycling
of
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aluminium
cans
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. As an
overall
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it is clear that
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 the
cans
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 collection is a main
stagestage
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stage stage
, whilst
the
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recycling is the
last
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stage
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 of the process. Now turning to the details, in the initial
stage
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, used
cans
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 are collected from a dumpster, and with the help of a collection truck recycled materials
transported
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 to the cleaning and sorting process.
Then
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after
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, all materials are segregated in
cleaning
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the cleaning
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 and compressing machine
on
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 a particular place, in the following
stage
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 processed
cans
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 are heated and melted in Melting Machine,
it
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 forms a liquid which is an important
stagestage
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stage stage
 of recycling.
In addition
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 to
this
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, the liquid is converted into
a
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an
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 aluminium sheet in a size of 2.5mm and
the
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a
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thickness of 6mm in
rolling
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the rolling
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stage
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. In the subsequent
stage
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, recycled
cans
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 are prepared from aluminium
sheet
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sheets
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, and in the final
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stage
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,stage
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 a beverage company in the UK used almost 75% of recycled
cans
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 for their soft drink.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cans, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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