A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to company in your letter -describe the benefit of sponsoring the sport team -summarise the benefits of paying the concepts -say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Gentlemen from

Sponsership

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Sponsorship

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Firstly

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, I would like to think you all for the

planing

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planning

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to sponsor in our area which you requested

that is

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the plan to choose either sponsor a local

children

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's athletics team or to pay for two open-air

concerts

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. In my opinion, Giving the donation to a local

children

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's fun will be more advantage of the local community as for

longer term

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than paying for two open-air

concerts

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. Because living healthy is required for society by supporting game's accessories to

children

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who

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not only the leader of the future

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but can push their parents to participate in sports activities. Some people in my area love to enjoy open-air

concerts

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, but they can participate

these

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in these

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concerts

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in only some hours.

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giving

sponsor

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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7 paragraphs

173 words

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